EFFECTING OF WATCHING TOO MUCH TELEVISION
At the present day,television is one of the most widespread mass media tools.It is so common that the television takes place almost in every part of our life.But unfortunately watching television so much can cause some matters.
Every person wants to spend time television but depending on it can cause many problems.It tallies the people's brain,especially children's.Children who are 4 between 7 years old annotate everything which they see on television as concrete.For example;they can try to do a scene of a cartoon which they saw.Besides when they watch a film which contains violence,horror or tension some problems,like insomnia, can appear.
Not only the television effects psychologically but also physically.Obesity is one of the most important examples of it.According to specialists,eating food in front of the television whets appetite and people who eat in front of the television dive so they don't become aware of how much food they eat.Thereby obesity shows an icrease substantly.
Furthermore,when it was watched more than several hours in a day,the television can bring out serious diseases such as eye defects,backache,cervical herniated disk etc..
As a result,it is harm of everything when it is exaggerated.So the television also should be used deliberately.If we don't want to suffer from these diseases we had better watch our step.
1-) The type you use when you write your essay is not acceptable. You should not use italic type.
YanıtlaSil2-) Leave a space after you use a punctuation such as comma and stop.
3-) The body paragraphs' extent should be similar. There is no problem for first and second paragraph, but you need to expand the final one.
okey Salih thanks to you I learnt how I should write and at least I edited the type of writing.thanks for your correction.
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